“For you.”
They stopped at the street corner. Daryl handed her a pink package wrapped in a white bow.
“What? How did you …” Shelly blinked and took the package.
He gave her a sheepish smile.
“Daryl. I don’t want to be a couple,” she said sternly.
He shrugged. “We’re friends. Friends give each other birthday gifts”
She pulled the card out while they walked across the street.
“I’d catch a grenade for ya.”
She laughed. “You and your military references. I swear …”
A car shot through the intersection. With lightening speed, Daryl pushed her out of the way.
The car struck him.
She screamed.
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Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….
This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt is in italics above.
This was such a nice even flow to it, and quite believable for one in love!
a surprise ending…a bit of a twist…nice job…
I’m blown away by how you kept this moving at such a rapid pace then brought it to the surprise ending! Terrific.
Wow. I’m really wanting more; I want Darryl to be okay. You did a great job creating the relationship, and then throwing in a tragic twist – within so few words.
xoRobyn
So sad and unexpected…he really would catch that grenade!
Gems x
No pun intended, but I didn’t see that one coming! Great take on the prompt.
Like cj, I could see this as clearly as if I were watching a movie. Your descriptive prose is perfect, and the dialogue feels very real. Kat
What a cliff-hanger! Your prose made the piece really move, and the concrete images made me see everything like a mini movie in my head.
Namaste……….cj
I forgot to say that I think your text is perfect!
Anna
Anna’s SC week 42 Maisy-Jane
Oh my goodness! This one sent cold chills down my spine! You are good, very good! I am really impressed. (And I am going down the list and am reading and commenting on every single participant today!)
I think I should take lessons from you! Do you have a workshop of your own?
Your text makes me speechless. It gave me goose-bumps on my arm.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna’s SC week 42 Maisy-Jane
Nice work on this.
=)
Daryl was true to his word, wasn’t he?
He made the ultimate sacrifice…great story.
Well that was seamless, and sad too! Daryl took one for her. 😦 ~Ames
Excellent job !