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The Situation is Worse Than You Think

The paramedics leaned over the woman, effectively blocking most of her body from the spectators. Their expressions were calm, but their eyes were concerned.

They worked on stabilizing the patient for nearly 90 seconds before they noticed it: a blood stain on her abdomen. It was growing bigger by the minute.

“Mommy! Wake up! Mommy please!” A little girl, not more than six-years old, screamed. Her voice sent shivers up the spectaculars’ spines. A man held her back so she wouldn’t fling herself on the injured woman.

“She’ll be fine,” one paramedic said out loud.

Their eyes met over the body.

It was a lie.

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Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….

This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt is in italics above.

21 thoughts on “The Situation is Worse Than You Think”

  1. I like your intense imagery, and the way all the different people elements form together tightly. You make them all play their roles so efficiently, I love precise story writing!

  2. This was a great take on the prompt and I liked it very much. I can only imagine this probably happens at accidents all the time. Very well written.

  3. Really good use of the prompt. I can’t wait for more – E 🙂

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  4. I agree with Kat…you were able to draw the reader in and we felt the emotions from both the girl and those paramedics who, though they encounter such situations daily, never get used to it.

    Bravo!

  5. This is really well written. You packed a lot of story into 100 words! Very good use of the prompt. It’s interesting how everyone is interpreting the prompt this week. I like yours very much!

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