The paramedics leaned over the woman, effectively blocking most of her body from the spectators. Their expressions were calm, but their eyes were concerned.
They worked on stabilizing the patient for nearly 90 seconds before they noticed it: a blood stain on her abdomen. It was growing bigger by the minute.
“Mommy! Wake up! Mommy please!” A little girl, not more than six-years old, screamed. Her voice sent shivers up the spectaculars’ spines. A man held her back so she wouldn’t fling herself on the injured woman.
“She’ll be fine,” one paramedic said out loud.
Their eyes met over the body.
It was a lie.
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Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….
This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt is in italics above.
So sad. Well written, but it pains my heart.
You are indeed a clever writer!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna’s SC week 40 ‘…growing bigger…’
How very, very sad. Good writing.
Excellent and heart wrenching !
A intense story…your words are visual and powerful. loved this one.
I like your intense imagery, and the way all the different people elements form together tightly. You make them all play their roles so efficiently, I love precise story writing!
You described this scene very well. I’ve seen it happen this way in real life.~Ames
So well written in 100 words, well done!
I liked this one a lot – very chilling. Great use of the prompt.
~Michelle
Really enjoyed this one.
Well done!
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ok. that was too good. I loved it.
This was a great take on the prompt and I liked it very much. I can only imagine this probably happens at accidents all the time. Very well written.
Ohhhhh chilling! This definately got your message across – lots of feeling and emotion in this one. Good job!
This is a sad one…makes me so bad for the child…but what else could they say?
This is very dark and powerful. I really like it. It was unexpected. Kudos to you!
xoRobyn
Oh my, this is well done…so much imagery and emotion in so few words…Peace and blessings
I’m still kind of recovering from 1-8-11, so it sort of gave me the shivvers. Great take on the prompt.
Really good use of the prompt. I can’t wait for more – E 🙂
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Oh no, not a lie! Hope all turns out good! Nice suspense in the prompt!
Well done! I can imagine being at the scene, and hearing the frightened cries of the child.
I agree with Kat…you were able to draw the reader in and we felt the emotions from both the girl and those paramedics who, though they encounter such situations daily, never get used to it.
Bravo!
This is really well written. You packed a lot of story into 100 words! Very good use of the prompt. It’s interesting how everyone is interpreting the prompt this week. I like yours very much!