Empty Promises

13 Nov

“So, you’re leaving your wife, right?”

“I told you I would, didn’t I?”

Sheila watched her married lover hurriedly pull on his pants and shrug into his t-shirt. He kept glancing at the clock.

“I’m going to be late,” he mumbled.

She tucked the sheet under her chin. “But you’re gonna do it this time, right?”

He shot her an impatient look, “Where’s my wedding ring?” he asked, his voice tinged with panic.

Something shiny caught her eye next to his pillow.

The early November sunshine cast golden rays onto the diamond chip.

Reaching out, she curled her fingers around the ring and assumed an innocent expression.

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Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….

This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt this week is in bold.

12 Responses to “Empty Promises”

  1. Jenny Matlock November 21, 2010 at 3:02 pm #

    Wow. What a great and different use of the prompt. This was so cool. It felt so real. You are really a master of dialogue, aren’t you?

    Thanks for linking.

  2. Sue Anderson November 20, 2010 at 1:12 pm #

    Excellent. Simply excellent.

    =)

  3. cj Schlottman November 17, 2010 at 4:11 pm #

    This is wonderful! The tension was palpable, and the concrete images make it very visual as well. Poor girl. He’ll never leaver home………….cj

  4. Teresa November 15, 2010 at 7:36 pm #

    Oh, so wicked. I love your tale. Unfortunately, there doesn’t usually seem to be any happy endings in these situations.

    Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/11/13/saturday-centus-week-28/

  5. Lynn Penton November 14, 2010 at 10:17 pm #

    Ooooh she is naughty. My centus was about an affair too. You played out the emotions well. Poor girl…but I don’t feel sorry for her…or him. Very well done.

  6. claudia November 14, 2010 at 11:43 am #

    Very nicely done, cute but shows emotions too….

  7. Viki November 14, 2010 at 10:58 am #

    I hope Sheila gets some sense and ditches the guy. Sounds like he’s not going to leave his wife to me, ha. Great take on the prompt.

  8. Judie November 14, 2010 at 9:50 am #

    I agree completely with Kat. Well done!!

  9. Kat November 14, 2010 at 8:18 am #

    This was really well done, you could feel the tension in the air. And I can just see her hand snaking out and snatching that ring. Hope she realizes what a cad he is before it’s too late! Kat

  10. Deborah November 14, 2010 at 5:43 am #

    Pefectly done and brilliantly written!

  11. PJ November 14, 2010 at 5:18 am #

    Did I ever LOVE this!!!!! So real, one would think you’d lived it!

  12. jfb57 November 14, 2010 at 3:18 am #

    Oooo I wonder if he will? He won’t will he – you’ve set all those naswers in this fab piece! Poor girl! She should move on!

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