Smart Enough to Know That Something Was Terribly Wrong

17 Mar

He had never been accused of being intelligent but Donald knew enough that he needed to help his momma.

She was lying on the floor and her lips were blue.

They didn’t have a phone in the apartment. His momma said they couldn’t afford one and her cell phone.

He didn’t know how to use her cell phone.

Donald poked her in the arm and began chanting, “Momma. Momma. Momma.”

He began crying, his voice rising until he was wailing.

Their neighbor pounded on the wall. “Shut up, retard!”

He cried harder.

He stumbled up, yanked open the door and stepped out into the big, scary world.

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(My apologizes – this is late. But hey, better late than never, right? :) )

Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….

This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt is in italics above.

4 Responses to “Smart Enough to Know That Something Was Terribly Wrong”

  1. Jenny Matlock March 20, 2011 at 8:03 pm #

    Oh no, Donald! Don’t do it. Don’t leave the house! Go back, child! Yikes! And she never taught the poor kid to dial 911 on the cell. Can you dial 911 on the cell? I need to find out. I need to teach my Grands to do it just in case.

    Darn.

    I’m all worried now.

    What a realistic and compelling read.

    Loved how intense this was.

  2. Anna's Adornments, Sweden March 19, 2011 at 8:22 am #

    So well-written Karen!
    Chilling. Poor boy.
    You put us there with so few words.
    Better late than never. I am even later that you!
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna’s SC week 45

  3. Nonna Beach March 17, 2011 at 1:35 pm #

    Very good take on the prompt Karen…worth waiting to read too !!!

  4. cj Schlottman March 17, 2011 at 11:11 am #

    This is so very sad, and unfortunately, timely. Your words are well crafted and filled with concrete images. I could see the whole thing.

    Namaste……….cj

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