Sacrifice

19 Feb

“For you.”

They stopped at the street corner. Daryl handed her a pink package wrapped in a white bow.

“What? How did you …” Shelly blinked and took the package.

He gave her a sheepish smile.

“Daryl. I don’t want to be a couple,” she said sternly.

He shrugged. “We’re friends. Friends give each other birthday gifts”

She pulled the card out while they walked across the street.

“I’d catch a grenade for ya.”

She laughed. “You and your military references. I swear …”

A car shot through the intersection. With lightening speed, Daryl pushed her out of the way.

The car struck him.

She screamed.

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Write up to 100 words, fact or fiction….

This is a themed writing meme hosted by Jenny Matlock. The goal is to write something that does not exceed 100 words (not including said prompt). The prompt is in italics above.

14 Responses to “Sacrifice”

  1. Karen S. February 21, 2011 at 7:18 pm #

    This was such a nice even flow to it, and quite believable for one in love!

  2. claudia February 21, 2011 at 8:03 am #

    a surprise ending…a bit of a twist…nice job…

  3. Nancy Jane February 20, 2011 at 7:02 pm #

    I’m blown away by how you kept this moving at such a rapid pace then brought it to the surprise ending! Terrific.

  4. Robyn Engel February 20, 2011 at 5:07 pm #

    Wow. I’m really wanting more; I want Darryl to be okay. You did a great job creating the relationship, and then throwing in a tragic twist – within so few words.
    xoRobyn

  5. Gems and Rhinestones February 20, 2011 at 12:02 pm #

    So sad and unexpected…he really would catch that grenade!
    Gems x

  6. Judie February 20, 2011 at 11:10 am #

    No pun intended, but I didn’t see that one coming! Great take on the prompt.

  7. Kat February 20, 2011 at 10:41 am #

    Like cj, I could see this as clearly as if I were watching a movie. Your descriptive prose is perfect, and the dialogue feels very real. Kat

  8. cj Schlottman February 20, 2011 at 8:52 am #

    What a cliff-hanger! Your prose made the piece really move, and the concrete images made me see everything like a mini movie in my head.

    Namaste……….cj

  9. Anna's Adornments, Sweden February 20, 2011 at 8:28 am #

    I forgot to say that I think your text is perfect!
    Anna
    Anna’s SC week 42 Maisy-Jane

  10. Anna's Adornments, Sweden February 20, 2011 at 8:26 am #

    Oh my goodness! This one sent cold chills down my spine! You are good, very good! I am really impressed. (And I am going down the list and am reading and commenting on every single participant today!)
    I think I should take lessons from you! Do you have a workshop of your own?
    Your text makes me speechless. It gave me goose-bumps on my arm.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna’s SC week 42 Maisy-Jane

  11. Sue Anderson February 20, 2011 at 1:01 am #

    Nice work on this.

    =)

  12. June Freaking Cleaver February 20, 2011 at 12:59 am #

    Daryl was true to his word, wasn’t he?

    He made the ultimate sacrifice…great story.

  13. Ames February 20, 2011 at 12:33 am #

    Well that was seamless, and sad too! Daryl took one for her. :( ~Ames

  14. Nonna Beach February 19, 2011 at 10:32 pm #

    Excellent job !

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