The Situation is Worse Than You Think

21 Responses to “The Situation is Worse Than You Think”

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   Anna's Adornments, Sweden February 11, 2011 at 3:20 am #

   So sad. Well written, but it pains my heart.
   You are indeed a clever writer!
   Best wishes,
   Anna
   Anna’s SC week 40 ‘…growing bigger…’
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   gaelikaa February 10, 2011 at 3:06 am #

   How very, very sad. Good writing.
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   Nonna Beach February 9, 2011 at 3:01 pm #

   Excellent and heart wrenching !
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   Rekha February 8, 2011 at 1:27 pm #

   A intense story…your words are visual and powerful. loved this one.
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   LEAT February 7, 2011 at 12:49 am #

   I like your intense imagery, and the way all the different people elements form together tightly. You make them all play their roles so efficiently, I love precise story writing!
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   Ames February 6, 2011 at 11:09 pm #

   You described this scene very well. I’ve seen it happen this way in real life.~Ames
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   Deborah February 6, 2011 at 3:31 am #

   So well written in 100 words, well done!
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   Michelle February 6, 2011 at 2:06 am #

   I liked this one a lot – very chilling. Great use of the prompt.
   ~Michelle
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   Sue Anderson February 6, 2011 at 1:37 am #

   Really enjoyed this one.

   Well done!

   =)
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    Donna February 5, 2011 at 9:29 pm #

    ok. that was too good. I loved it.
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    Viki February 5, 2011 at 6:21 pm #

    This was a great take on the prompt and I liked it very much. I can only imagine this probably happens at accidents all the time. Very well written.
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    Cherie February 5, 2011 at 6:16 pm #

    Ohhhhh chilling! This definately got your message across – lots of feeling and emotion in this one. Good job!
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    claudia February 5, 2011 at 6:04 pm #

    This is a sad one…makes me so bad for the child…but what else could they say?
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    Robyn Engel February 5, 2011 at 3:26 pm #

    This is very dark and powerful. I really like it. It was unexpected. Kudos to you!
    xoRobyn
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    jeff February 5, 2011 at 2:48 pm #

    Oh my, this is well done…so much imagery and emotion in so few words…Peace and blessings
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    Judie February 5, 2011 at 2:46 pm #

    I’m still kind of recovering from 1-8-11, so it sort of gave me the shivvers. Great take on the prompt.
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    Elysabeth February 5, 2011 at 2:08 pm #

    Really good use of the prompt. I can’t wait for more – E

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    Karen S. February 5, 2011 at 1:53 pm #

    Oh no, not a lie! Hope all turns out good! Nice suspense in the prompt!
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    June Freaking Cleaver February 5, 2011 at 12:51 pm #

    Well done! I can imagine being at the scene, and hearing the frightened cries of the child.
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    Polly (5th Sister) February 5, 2011 at 12:49 pm #

    I agree with Kat…you were able to draw the reader in and we felt the emotions from both the girl and those paramedics who, though they encounter such situations daily, never get used to it.

    Bravo!
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    Kat February 5, 2011 at 12:44 pm #

    This is really well written. You packed a lot of story into 100 words! Very good use of the prompt. It’s interesting how everyone is interpreting the prompt this week. I like yours very much!

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